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February 10th, 2011 admin

Cage Bow Quiver

What do you think of these lyrics?

The flesh is sizzling,
Limb muscles twitching,
Deep tissues pulling where the boiling blood anoints.

The bones are cracking,
The cracks leak marrow,
Bubbling as the fire barbs pry the joints.

Bowing spars, taut sinews.
The homes you had forever lose.

The chest cage quivers,
The skeleton clicks and shivers,
Pulse racing forth and back as the hidden heart directs

Thanks =D

Umm... honestly... not good.
It's like a scientist's song and it kind of reminds me of Frankenstein's monster.
I think that you've perhaps used too many 'smart' words like anoints and sinews.
If this song means anything to you then I'd start over and get that message across.

Let me know if you re-do it,I'm really interested to know what it's about!